I found myself enjoying this, in spite of your relentless proclivity for passivity. (I’m joking. It wasn’t excessive or even very noticeable.) I felt the characters were very believable. Their dialogue sounded authentic, also. I do care about both of them, so much that I want to read the second chapter. Continue with this. Definitely.

Pros

Great characters. Authentic dialogue. Compelling premise.

Cons

I don't have Chapter 2.